Jasmine rushed around her room, stumbling over the countless items of clutter that were carelessly tossed around her room. Jasmine’s mornings went the same everyday: she woke up to the final snooze of her alarm going and proceeded to spend the entire morning recklessly running around late for school. But, following the chaos of her hectic school mornings came a one, fleeting moment of serenity as she would stand in front of her oak wood dresser. Every morning as she would stand in front of that dresser she would pause, and then ever so carefully, pick up her set of pearl earrings and clasp them on each of her ears. Pausing, in remembrance of her mother who had passed away just six short months prior. I say short, but to Jasmine those months drug on like eternity, never ending, every day just as bad as the day before. The pearl earrings belonged to Jasmine’s mother, who shared the same dark black hair as Jasmine did. The whites of the pearls perfectly contrasting and standing out against Jasmine’s jet black hair as she stood in front of her dresser and remembered the day her mother put them on for the very last time.

Jasmine snapped out of her trance just as her dad banged on her bedroom door, “Jasmine it’s time to go. You’re going to be late, again.” His voice sounded so broken and fragile, almost as if his words would be the last thing that Jasmine could handle. She replied a steady, “Okay” while she admired her earrings for a second longer before transitioning her long black hair from behind her ears to over her ears, covering the shimmering whites of the pearl earrings. She remembered how bright and white the pearls used to look to her when her mother wore them, and to other people she’s sure they still look like this, but to her they no longer sparkle. They look dull and subdued, covered with the pain and the loss of her mother. Jasmine still wears them regardless of what they look like to her though, because this is what helps her carry on the morning routine she shared with her mother, who is no longer there to wear the earrings herself.
Author's Note: This writing was inspired by the pearl earrings that my mother wears everyday and our conversations in the morning.
Hey Hope, I like that your inspiration for this piece was based on the little things in life that we never seem to think twice about until they're gone. This was a great piece, keep up the good work.
ReplyDeleteHi Hope! I can relate to your story quiet a bit because I take time to talk to my mom every morning too. I like how you used the pair of earrings to represent the bond between Jasmine and her mother in your story. I also really enjoyed your main character. Jasmine is a very relatable character and I could connect with her as I read. Your story is great! Good job and keep up the good work!
ReplyDeleteI like what you did with this, Grace. Such strong imagery in the lines describing the mother getting ready and a truth we can probably all relate to that we aren't always as tuned in to our conversations with people we love as we would be if we knew it could be the last one we'd get. These lines are especially effective: "She remembered how bright and white the pearls used to look to her when her mother wore them, and to other people she’s sure they still look like this, but to her they no longer sparkle. They look dull and subdued, covered with the pain and the loss of her mother."
ReplyDeleteHey Hope! This was amazing! I loved how I could totally relate to this. There was such strong imagery, something I really enjoyed! It was easy to understand exactly what the character was going through. I love how her character talked to her mom every morning, which is something I always do as well. This was great hope!
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